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Dina Abuali

Can we start over 
And pretend to see the light
So it may come to vision
And see the stars align
A man once loved a woman
Lived his life for a cure
A cure of pure simplicity
And this woman has made him sure
Moving too fast
Forgetting his patience
Caught up in a trance of love
Barely noticing what has been fading
Memories keeping him alive
Making him saint
Turning him to an angel
A position to not faint 

 

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Umahani Hamad

This is so beautiful and intricate. I loved how it talks about the effects of love. I hope I’m not interpreting it wrong but it seems to me like it highlights the effects of love others don’t talk about and it makes the poem that much more interesting.
Sun, Feb 7 2021 3:45 am Permalink
Lamis Idris

I love these lines “ Forgetting his patience Caught up in a trance of love Barely noticing what has been fading Memories keeping him alive” you really speak to this man’s character and how he’s slowly losing himself. I love it<3
Sun, Feb 7 2021 7:22 am Permalink
Tibyan

I love the depth of this poem and especially the contrast you made with “ making him saint turning him to an angel”. Poem writing is very hard and complex, but when I read this it proves to me that it’s a real gift that only some know how to convert the power of words to beautiful art. Love it!
Sun, Feb 7 2021 5:41 pm Permalink
Mudather hamid

This was a beautiful portrayal of what many people and even youth are going through right now I really loved this I hope to see more !!
Sun, Feb 7 2021 6:23 pm Permalink
Merna E.

The power in this poem speaks for itself ! I am so in love with this poem and I hope you continue to share so many more. And the way that I am able to picture your words, breathtaking...
Sun, Feb 7 2021 7:00 pm Permalink
Lena

The nonlinear storytelling indirectly relates to the idea of regrets, regrets that leave us thinking and realize that they were not thinking in that moment. Also, I love the shift from first person to third person. It gives a broader perspective. Great job :)
Sun, Feb 7 2021 7:10 pm Permalink

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